Thread "Off Hours" in forum "The Webcomic Review Forum for the Webcomic Review Comic on the Web"

Posted at 10:01PM, Jan. 28, 2010

Off Hours - great art, but we didn't really think of it as any more than a glorified fan art gallery. Thoughts?

Posted at 3:01PM, Jan. 29, 2010

Man, this forum IS bad ass!

Posted at 4:01PM, Jan. 29, 2010

I thought it might be self-serving to respond in the comments section. I appreciate the kind words on the art.

Concerning the story, I'm curious how much of Chapter 2 you guys read? A lot of chapter 1 was spent on introducing the characters, the concept and experimentation. The second chapter starts off with an extended action sequence and then goes on to character development.

There's still almost 20 pages left and you will see quite a bit of story progression.

Regardless, thanks for the review.

Posted at 4:01PM, Jan. 29, 2010

If the story takes off in the second half then I would recommend restructuring heavily.
The early section gives the impression of no plot to speak of and this makes it very hard going.
By the time I got into chapter 2, I was so burned out I wasn't able to take much in.