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dude, read my comic joes bad day
totallyraddad at 7:03PM, April 4, 2016
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hey guys,

i'm totallyraddad and I would totally appreciate it if you read the first page of joes bad day. its a choose your own adventure comic that relies on input to work. i worked pretty hard on the first page and it would be super neat bonbeato if you guys read it.

-TOTALLYRADDAD
totallyraddad at 7:07PM, April 4, 2016
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hey guys like i said if you help that would be greeeeat
totallyraddad at 7:11PM, April 4, 2016
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whats a guy gotta do around here to get some damn attention? i will not dance like peewee in the biker bar if thats what you sickos want
Genejoke at 4:07PM, April 5, 2016
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Not trying to be harsh but… go to dafont and get a better font than comic sans. Make sure all writing is clearly legible. And I'd recommend getting photoshop/gimp/manga studio rather than using paint. It will make creating pages far easier.
totallyraddad at 10:28PM, April 5, 2016
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Genejoke wrote:
Not trying to be harsh but… go to dafont and get a better font than comic sans. Make sure all writing is clearly legible. And I'd recommend getting photoshop/gimp/manga studio rather than using paint. It will make creating pages far easier.


duly noted man. thanks for the critique, i can probably get photoshop from my friend so theres no problem there. ill redo the page and you tell me what you think man. thanks again
totallyraddad at 11:05PM, April 5, 2016
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so i fixed up the comic if you wanna see. used photoshop this time. check it out when you can and tell me if it helped. i also made minor improvements in terms of story.
Genejoke at 2:59AM, April 8, 2016
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Looking better.
totallyraddad at 8:03PM, April 10, 2016
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yaaaay!

next page will be even sweeter. i'm changing it up
totallyraddad at 5:23PM, Sept. 18, 2016
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just reviving this to let yall know i updated. constructive criticism is always welcomed. ive been sorta going in a new direction. it helps with stuff, ya'know?

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