Author notes

A Gathering Storm Chapter 2 Page 1

Dumok

on July 19, 2008

One of the things that bothered me about vim is that I often made her look too much like a little girl. In this version I did my best to show her as more of a grown woman albeit of a slightly less intelligent race of Slaves. I think that while "less cute" I think I managed to capture someone who had a really tough life.
The previous dialog left a LOT to be desired, Especially with Rivka.
Yes she's smart, but She is Still an Orc and wouldn't think twice about calling someone STOOPID or sweetie often in the same sentence.