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6-24 State Of Shock

stinger9

on May 30, 2020

Still not as shocking as me getting a page out! (Long notes incoming!)
Yeah, I should probably sum that up, tablet was unusable for a time, combined with general feeling of crapiness. Not all bad though, started working on some 3d stuff for backgrounds and characters, been posting those over on twitter), and yeah, hopeful back working on stuff again.
Another of those things that kept bugging me here, was Tan using the word cool. She's said it before, but it just bothered me here for some reason. I guess I can just chalk it up to it being a closest translation to what she would have said (Since technically fantasy world, there's no England, why would they speak English!) or hey, maybe it's just Ffenicmere dialect that's been around for thousands of years :P
Despite those visual effects, the barrier is less of the electric shock sort, and more of a paralyzing, dissociative kind of deal (Honestly, still pretty horrific!). I just can't pass up an opportunity for some glowiness!
Bunch of cut stuff about this page too, so I guess this is as good a time as any to go into some of it!
1) I almost did consider having the chest be a mimic! So many reasons why I didn't go with that one!
2) There was some dialogue explaining how Edan knew it was trapped (Cian does too, but he's too drunk to care!) That will probably come up at some point after this chapter is long forgotten though!
3) There was also some dialogue suggesting Tan had fallen prey to the exact same trap before, multiple times (Hey, wizard's towers had great loot if you could get to it!) That got trimmed away while trying to pick up the pace a little.
But we're almost at the end of part one of this chapter (Which was originally the only part of the chapter, so glad I changed that! The second half was technically there , but was more like a single page!)
Hopefully, no more interruptions! (Assume there will be more interruptions!)