Illegal Aliens First Prev - Know things - smoke? - Um hi! - behind you - You know what? - Why are you here - Waiting - Pity the fool! - walking out - Approved - work - You-Morning - idiot - try - view - Shh!! Jacob - lights - wake up - shades - Lunch - Hands - Strange - Duty - Liability - Quarters - lunch - making of a page - Money! - Goals? - Invisible - In the Air - Sup! - Don't know - crazy - signs - greys - Dream a little dream - lazy - easy - jerk - yellow - So... - Stewey - Patrionize - Chemistry - Yawn - Wake Up - Problems... - Contact! - Praise the Architecht! - Excellent! Lt. Dake Next Last First Prev - Know things - smoke? - Um hi! - behind you - You know what? - Why are you here - Waiting - Pity the fool! - walking out - Approved - work - You-Morning - idiot - try - view - Shh!! Jacob - lights - wake up - shades - Lunch - Hands - Strange - Duty - Liability - Quarters - lunch - making of a page - Money! - Goals? - Invisible - In the Air - Sup! - Don't know - crazy - signs - greys - Dream a little dream - lazy - easy - jerk - yellow - So... - Stewey - Patrionize - Chemistry - Yawn - Wake Up - Problems... - Contact! - Praise the Architecht! - Excellent! Lt. Dake Next Last Author notes Um hi! Ziffy88 on Nov. 12, 2008 More awkward moments between two individuals! Yay! For a scifi story I think I need to balance the sci fi and character aspects alot more. Also alot of my dialog seems to go no where. I need to focus on whether it moves plot or characters. Comments Please login to comment. Login or Register ${ comment.author }} at ${ comment.date_added }} Delete Reply ${ comment.author }} at ${ comment.date_added }} Delete «previous set of pages «previous set of pages page ${ page.number }} ... next set of pages» next set of pages»
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