Limbo
Author notes
#1 Welcome to Limbo
the1truesushiboy onAn experimental comic. I've got a lot of miscellaneous ideas that have no proper place in a serious story, so I'm throwing them all together in this "whatever" comic. No plot, but one may develop. I've already gotten ideas for long term "goals" of the robot.
Comments
Please login to comment.
Login or RegisterJety Lefr at
One example of good advice here. Make the panel borders look more official and fancy(?). It will make the rest of the art look much better and will inform people that it looks the way it's supposed to.
Also, I actually like the shape of the panel borders you have here already.
Ka_rin at
I can give much art critiquing here. For starters plan out how much space your text will take before your write it out. A second sheet of notebook paper or the like is useful for that. Also smaller marker type for the text will keep it from becoming hard to read as it is in panel four for mac's name. I'm going to PM you a bunch of art theory stuff from an excellent art blog in a moment.
The dialogue itself is very crisp and simple yet it says worlds about what is going on. This is good.
I cannot make any pacing or storyline based comics yet but you've caught my interest and that is good and somewhat difficult to achieve.
Overall I'd say it's an excellent start towards a good comic. I'll also go lenient on the scoring as it's the inaugural page.
the1truesushiboy at
Hehe, yes, the first few pages are full of exposition, explaining the rules of Limbo.
NightReflection at
Interesting concept. If I know you you've got the full set of twisted reality rules on paper already.
Try not to lose us. We are a bit slow this side, hehe.