Author notes

Master Mummy - Page 5

darrell

on June 15, 2011

This page didn't really come out as dynamic as I'd like. One thing I'd do differently if I was doing this page over, that first panel is way too big for what is shown. Either zoom in on Blue, or pan out to show some carnage on the street (like the hole he left in the building) or shrink the panel which I think I'd go with. I was going to try to go for a much more dynamic angle for the large panel but it just wasn't working and I ended up going straight on. I think the visual still works but not quite as well as it could have. I also debated sound effects. I think they could have added something but trying to fit in 4 "krashes" (or whatever noises each would have) kept cluttering it up way too much for my liking. I just couldn't find a way to get them in there nicely. So I decided to hope a silent panel works instead.

I am glad you liked the bubbles I'm using. Interesting that you assumed it was his wife (it is), I guess it was the "honey" that gave it away but I still find it interesting that you made that leap to marriage. When I was developing this idea I was actually worried that the comparison to Oracle would be brought up but I decided not to let that change my plans.

Legend Comics – Thanks for the feedback.

shastab24 – Yeah, this was my plan was to introduce his home life slightly through dialog with his wife (and possibly others) before really getting into it. The current plan is for the next storyline to touch on it (and their past) a bit more.

I am Candyman – Thanks!