Time Breakers

Dream "Man"'s Stage: Review 6: Flying Choas

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Dream "Man"'s Stage: Review 6: Flying Choas

Ndraxian Zero
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Well now I once again find myself with an important charector showing up without a name. (She had a name, but I found a charector with the same name in another comic (One of my favorites) and due to the chance that the charectors owner might submit him if I decide to request cameos (Not sure how likely it would be…) I've decided the charector needs a new name…
Oh and I might have another update tommorow for you guys, I'm currently on a spriting spree.

Anyways, this is the last review of this set,
The next set of reviews will come later, so far there is only three of them. If you are the author of the remain three, don't worry I'll get to them. Oh and by the way, this is the only one that comes from outside the duck.

Flying Choas:
http://www.smackjeeves.com/comicprofile.php?id=27837

To be honest, it's start, well was a BnG clone comic. Not the best way to do things… But its a way of doing things. Later however the humor and the overall comic quality seemed to improve drastically once the robotizer was built. I really started to like the comic after the game parady started. And you've done a few things that are still rare in megaman game paradies, showing an entire level with stage hazards. You've used backgrounds throughout and mixed them up enough that they haven't gotten stale. Plus I haven't found a single plot hole yet. This comic will continue to improve. There's an overused plot point here and there, but its not that bad as of yet. There's a few unused references/jokes that show up from time to time as well, which makes up for the stale jokes. So overall I'll call it a growing comic thats slightly about average. I would have loved to see the robotized kirby villians actually look robotized, but I take it you didn't want to put that much work into it/you're not skilled enough to do so yet. Keep at this and this comic can easily grow to a really good comic, don't let anyone tell you otherwise, but definitly take any advice you can get (Other than stop the comic of course). I loved the way you did the sound effects.

Slight tip: If the kirby bosses are going to show up to be robotized, definitely use Cracko (The cloud boss), Squeek squad has a mecha cracko that would be a conveinent robotized cracko for you, And I'm sure the spriter's resource has both of them ripped.

Other tip: Try to use some suspense, the earliest comics suffered from being too blunt and direct, which is good at times, but doesn't hook readers. Also… Try a few zoom shots.

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