Pokemon Nickel

- An Errand For Elm (#1- Too Early To Get Up)

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- An Errand For Elm (#1- Too Early To Get Up)

LupaLynn
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Urk…. This comic isn't that great, and is probably not the best way to start out. I've found that my weakest writing area is in exposition. Once I get a story up and going, I'm fine, but getting it started is another story. (I've had to put off doing a few other drawn comics that I want to do because I can't come up with a good way to begin them… this is really becoming a big problem for me.)

If I can get through these first few tedious pages and get Gold (perhaps his name should have bene Nickel since this is Nickel Version, but it doesn't feel right calling him anything except Gold) out of his house and to the lab, everything should be fine. Then I'll have to come back and redo this page after I've improved my writing skills.

As further proof of how bad my writing is, I didn't get Gold's personality to come across as I wanted it to. He seems too whiney…. The reason he doesn't want to go is that he'd much rather just go back to bed; and though he wants to become a Pokemon Trainer, the promise of a Pokemon isn't enough because he's in no hurry to get out and start adventuring. I suppose the other thing I need to work on is characterization….

My sprites aren't all that great, but they could have been a lot worse. Obviously, I'm still getting the hang of creating sprites rather than just ripping them…. When I come back to rewrite this page, I'll also have to make a new one of Gold's mom.

Well, that's all I have as far as complaints, so I'll shut up until Thursday.

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